Egretstar; Mysteryclan. {Audition}

[snicki]

Name: Egretstar

Age: thirty moons

Gender: she-cat

Alliance: mysteryclan

Rank: leader

Outer Beauty:

[/i] a good idea. She is plenty strong, but built to be faster than anything else -- which she definitely uses in battle.[/ul]

Inner Beauty:

Past:

Kin:

[/b] Rushfoot - alive, queen
FATHER, Crowleaf - alive, elder
BROTHER, Heronstep - alive, warrior
SISTER, Dandelionpaw - deceased
SISTER, Puddle-eyes - alive, warrior
(of course, she has others, but these were her littermates)[/ul]

IC Sample:

[/i] Then there had been a loud screeching sound; a painful sound left the golden tabby's mouth then it was silent for all but the monster driving off. ...out, she had finished her statement. Cautiously, Egretpaw moved forward towards the hard Thunderpath. Dandelionpaw..? The tabby was...dead. But. No! What would her parents say?! It was all her fault. It had to be. She'd been trying to warn her. The black cat heard a rustling as her father (and her mentor) made his way over, meowing her name questioningly. She couldn't let him see her here...

As she ran off in another direction to get to the camp, she heard a sad caterwaul and then the scene switched to her Warrior ceremony. On one side of her, her identical sister sat, walking up to gain her Warrior name -- Puddle-eyes. It suits her, the black she-cat thought indifferently. Then Heronpaw walked forward to get his. Finally, it was her time. Excitement coursed through her fur as she walked up.

Then the scene switched again, and she was standing in front of her dead Leader's body. There's too much death here, she had thought. It had been then that she had ran off, much like she had after her sister's death -- as if to loose herself in the forest she was so familiar with. She skidded to a halt by a fallen tree, a thought overcoming her. She was... She would be the leader, now. I'm not ready for that! The black she-cat sat down, curling up on the wet leaves and drifting off into an uncomfortable sleep.

In the real world, however, Egretstar had jumped awake, dark greens wide and fearful. She hated those dreams. Remembering her sister and Leader always upset her. I doubt I'll be able to sleep again...

And, with that, Egretstar stretched out. She made her way outside of her den, out to the dark camp, and sat down in the clearing. Opening her mouth in a large yawn, she pondered what to do. Perhaps she would be able to join some sort of patrol... There was sure to be one leaving soon, right?[/ul]

Did you read the rules? *edited out* [/blockquote][/size]

[S C O R P I A]

Thanks for the audition! Like I said to the others, I'm going to wait for at least one more bio before I decide. Please feel free to make more bios, RP, dance, sing, and drive me crazy. Egretstar looks good, the only thing I noticed was the fact that the names in the history were a little bit odd. Dandelionpaw? Puddle-eyes is a bit strange too, but only because it doesn't seem natural to me to see the dash in the middle of the name.

Other than that, your audition looks great!

[snicki]

Well, yes...Dandelion -- cause Warriors are named after nature things, so I think that it could be used.

And the dash was like with One-eye from the first series? It would've looked a bit awkward to have Oneeye or Puddleeyes, yeah?

If you really would like me to, I'm fine changing them. I just like more unusual names. x:

But thank you! And I'm back from Europe. cx

[S C O R P I A]

Its fine, I guess. Its just always bugged me with the dash thing; no clue why. Since they're in history it should be okay. That's just my own... odd thing.

And like I told all the others, while I wait for more auditions feel free to make more bios, RP, and run into walls. I don't care what you do, just have fun ^^

[S C O R P I A]

Sorry Snicki, but Egretstar didn't get the position. She seems like a very interesting cat, though, and if you want to edit him into a warrior feel free to do so! C: